Kylie J

Chapter 1 "There's no denying the Kravitz," Sam declared to no one in particular, cranking up the Honda's radio dial. The wind kicked his shaggy, brown bangs back as it ...

QiGuaiGongFu, thank you for the best crit I have received for this story. I went back and changed most of the things you mentioned....I have a couple things I left ...

please leave crit, any and all is appreciated. preface The Boom Boom Room operated on strict premises. It had to. It had no known security and only one bouncer, Jordan. ...

Where is the hand holder's long forgotten touch.....

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I like this story. It's got a good plot so far and is interesting to readers. I only got through chapter one, but when I have more time I'll probably ...

The style this is written in is hard for readers to understand. Half the time I had no clue who was talking, or what they were talking about. You should ...

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1. pizza & coke 2. "sleeping in" 3. seeing my family (i'm visiting them in india at the moment) Crysi, how long have you been playing the flute? It took ...

Wow, so good. And I mean that in the good-but-totally-creepy-and-almost-grossing-me-out kinda way. But good. The only problem I had was in the first chapter, it mentions Bryant is perfect too ...

^ is my unoffical liberal talking history book

3. That one song that says "I would swallow my pride, I would choke on the rhine, but the lack thereof would leave me empty inside." My non favorite thing ...

(psst - no fair CL!)